Wednesday, September 05, 2007

old haikus

turn off, alarm, please
I need a few more minutes
late to class again

oatmeal, newspapers
wrapped up in my fleece blanket
breezy sunny day

vegetarian
chili and cheez-its for lunch
way way too much salt

I'm falling asleep—
public bureacracy and
EEP again

and now to Udon
for passionfruit with Heather
then maybe Beaners?

our yard looks so strange
naked, no trees, but trucks stuck
Mother Nature wins

homework and Apple
dinner, study group and bed
uneventful life


Hope the open seas
and sushi are good to you
I miss miss miss you!

3 comments:

JD Forslin said...

What are the rules of Haiku's?

Yels said...

Technically, the only rule is that the phrasing of each line has to contain 5, 7, 5 syllables. Traditionally, the last line has the "biggest" idea, but you can do a lot with them. Try it! They're fun to play around with.

David said...

Actually, without the big idea ending, Haiku's wind up sounding like well sculpted prose.

oatmeal, newspapers
wrapped up in my fleece blanket
breezy sunny day

our yard looks so strange
naked, no trees, but trucks stuck
Mother Nature wins

homework and Apple
dinner, study group and bed
uneventful life

These three work best, and my personal favorite is the second one, as it has the best ending. Keep up the good work : )